Sorry, this is gonna be a really quick critique...
I for sure like the song as a whole. Nice imagery. My issue is the pre-chorus/chorus. The last line is "now i want you to see" and goes into "how can you not see" I think you should choose between the first line of the chorus and the last line of the pre-chorus. Too repetitive for me.
Re: THE ONE I LOST
Sorry, this is gonna be a really quick critique...
I for sure like the song as a whole. Nice imagery. My issue is the pre-chorus/chorus. The last line is "now i want you to see" and goes into "how can you not see" I think you should choose between the first line of the chorus and the last line of the pre-chorus. Too repetitive for me.