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Poem/Lyrics i wrote...sad story behind it
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Tuesday, June 30, 2009 - 13:02
Poem/Lyrics i wrote...sad story behind it
Okay I wrote this for a kid I went to school with...I never spoke a word to him and I have regretted it for years cuz who knows...I could have been the one to save him...He was real emo and he used to have bandages on his wrists and people used to pick on him all the time...One day at school he had left a letter on someones desk saying that he was going to show everybody...thats all it said...well the next day it was announced that he had hung himself...The letter never got turned in that day so nobody could have intervened...
(Verse) I cut my wrist just to watch it bleed
These are the moments that I need
to hear somebody say "I love you"
Just to know somebody cares
(Chorus) But it never happens that way, no matter how much I pray
My life is a dream that is shaded in gray
Suicide as a teen, I have no one to intervene
So I'll die as the one who couldn't be seen
(Verse) I tighten the noose as I make this truce
To forgive the world of all its abuse
I wish somebody was here to pull me down
Somebody who'd shed a tear
(Chorus) But it never happens that way, no matter how much I pray
My life is a dream that is shaded in gray
Suicide as a teen, I have no one to intervene
So I'll die as the one who couldn't be seen
(Bridge) And now that I'm gone, the world rolls on
But the hopes that I held will remain
and others will say the same...
(Chorus) it never happens that way, no matter how much I pray
My life is a dream that is shaded in gray
Suicide as a teen, I have no one to intervene
So I'll die as the one who couldn't be seen.
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Woah....That is sad story...
You have great song writing abilities.
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The Life I Think About
Is So Much Better Than This
I Never Thought I'd Be Stuck In This Mess
I'm Sick Of Wondering
Is It Life, Or Death.....
I understand where you are coming from but God no I do not think he is better off now...Sure he had a choice and that was his choice but thats also all he knew...as I said if he would have known how much it affected someone he didnt even know then maybe things would have been different but now we cant know anything for sure...
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We had time on our side...I never meant to let it die!!!
Very good lyrics. Hits the nail on the head, I think.
I understand your sympathy for the boy, and I agree with it.
But I also think that some of the responsibility should be on his head, you know? I live by the philosophy that you always have a choice. Always. That's gotten me through a lot in life. But that was his choice. Nothing you could have done about it. And you can't blame yourself for that kid making his choice.
I don't want to come across as cold or anything. I know people have problems. But how you react to those problems, that's what builds character. And people who don't have what it takes to pull through, and they just give up, well, that shows their character.
Have you ever thought that maybe it was best for him? Getting to that point is bad, but maybe he was better off, than staying in a world that held nothing for him. Or at least, that's what he thought.
I don't know. Suicide puzzles me, so I should probably stop talking. But great lyrics. Touching.
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"Where do you turn, when all the eyes around you, looking at you, only see a monster?"
Those are really, really good lyrics.
That's a pretty sad story, too. But like others said; you shouldn't blame yourself.
thanks for reading this to all that have...you guys are the first to read it i wrote it over 4 years ago and just had it sitting around so i figured id share with people who i could trust not to be cynics or make fun of the situation...I just ask that if you ever come into this type of situation take an assertive stance and talk to the person and let them know atleast someone cares...even if its a complete stranger cuz that would mean alot to someone contemplating suicide...its a horrible reality and nobody deserves to feel so worthless that they dont want to live, ya know.
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We had time on our side...I never meant to let it die!!!
Wow......I dont even know what to say.....That's one of the saddest things i have heard in a while. I do think they are beautiful lyrics though and would make a great song.
But that's not yours to hold. It's everyone's who talked behind his back and made him feel that way. It should be on their conscience, not yours.
I think it's more a song than a poem but is awesome
s*** no way, that sucks. but ur poem is awesome
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yo
The lyrics are amazing.. they're so deep and meaningful. I really like it.
The story is sad.. but you shouldn't blame yourself. You weren't to know what was going to happen (:
As a poem I think it has too much Rhyming but as a song I think it would work good. Like with poetry a lot of times people who rhyme don't know how to and they end up overdoing it. But overall I think it's a good song/poem. My friend calls herself emo and I want to punch her for that, she once called me emo and I nearly did just that it was funny, because my entire class was in the girls locker room changing. Good times, I always get in fights in the locker rooms. anyway back to the poem, very nicee.
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dayna
wow, that song is amazingly deep. very sad story though.
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I got some good news for you hhuuuhhhh?!
Thanks for the comments and yeah it is a sad story but the worst part is it couldve been so much different. I have blamed myself i have blamed others, and I have blamed his family but the fact is it happened and it is a horrible thing to hold on your conscience...feeling that you could have done something differently to save someones life...the worst thought i have about it is wondering what was running through his mind right before, ya know...he had to be so hurt...but yeah thats why i wrote this cuz it lifted the stress I held about the situation...anyways the moral of this story is if he only knew that what he did affected someone he didnt even know so much that they lost sleep over it maybe he would've done things differently....
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We had time on our side...I never meant to let it die!!!
Oh, the poem was amazing,
&the story...that's very sad.
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We are the ones
We get knocked down
We get back up and stand above the crowd.
whoa this is great. thanks for sharing, realli.
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Help me believe
It's not the real me
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We're just inches away,
But I feel miles apart.
Why am I alone in a crowd?
This was great dude.
...... -speechles-
wow
thats like a really really sad story though
great poem though
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"I HAVE HAD IT WITH THESE MOTHER f***IN SNAKES ON THIS MOTHER f***ING PLANE"- Max Greene from escape the fate.... which kinda sucks now without ronnie
I LOVE YOU
~kasidy
thats a really sad story.. :'(
great poem/lyrics
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music is love
yeah, sad story
great poem
wow, that's amazing.... well the story is sad but the poem is great.... it makes me think about some things happen in my life... thanks for sharing this
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BEING NORMAL IS JUST CRAZY!!!!